Dear Grace
This is a story about Grace’s life for the past few years
I particularly enjoyed how interesting and engaging the stories are.
I did not really like the style of your writing so much.
What resonates with me is how peaceful and calm your story is.
The character seems very interesting.
I’m interested in exploring more aspects of your life.
One detail that strikes me as significant is how peaceful/calm your story is because it makes me feel positive and happy.
One detail that strikes me as random, and could probably be cut is "I was confused on why it's not called "Covid-20" instead”
I want to know more in depth about your life.
I don’t want to know nothing. I think your story is pretty good and to be honest, I don’t think it deserves any deleting but I think you should add more information.
I would like to see more going in-depth about the story. Most of the time, the story seems to be flying very fast. It seems to be the general timeline rather than explaining the small details.
My advice you going forward in the rewrite is add more details in there, and maybe add one of those literacy devices Mr. Bailey suggested.
It appears that I have liked your story very much.
One major theme in this story seems to be the fly – paced, broad, overview of Grace’s life.
The ending is pretty nice. It seems to be very calm and peaceful.
Some other suggestions that I have:
No more suggestions. I think this is a pretty good story :D
His suggestions to me were really useful and I used some of his advice to improve and edit my work. Like for example, adding more details about my life and removing some parts that aren't necessary. I used these advices to try and make my work better so that the readers can visualize and understand more about what was going though my head or what was going on in general.
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